Here is a business pitch with my new idea, so I am looking forward to your feedback.
If video playback doesn't work this is the link: https://youtu.be/4EVg0UgM3e4
2. Well last time, I realized that there were other elements to include and to use to keep the audience interested and listening to your pitch. This time I tried to encompass all of those elements in the video and get to my point quicker. I do not think that this one was as enthusiastic, but that is primarily because this is a much more serious topic to talk about. I still liked the props because that was very popular last time. I also think I looked a little too stiff last time, so I decided to go with a brighter more open outfit. Please let me know if that affected my professionalism.
3. I made sure that I was speaking faster to get more in. I think that I was clearer this time and had a good hook to keep the audience interested. Not necessarily feedback, but listening to other business pitches I was glad to take what they did and incorporate it into my video. Like I said in the last paragraph, I felt stiff personally, and I think this outfit makes me seem more open-minded and welcoming. I tried to keep the same use of hands, but that is just more normal speaking mannerisms. I am very happy to have implemented every portion of a business pitch into this idea, but I would like to see even more last time. After several takes that came to this same length and depth, so that is definitely something I want to improve on last time.
Hello Nicholas,
ReplyDeleteWhat a great job. You look like your ready to be on the next Shark Tank episode. Your idea has grown so much since the beginning. Your choice of outfit was very professional. I sadly did not have a jacket but was able to wear a button down. Your pitch looks like you took lots of practice. I enjoyed that you used a poster. You did a good job at fixing what people told you to do differently.